I haven't done this since I came back so am curious what people thought of my PPV RPs. Any CONSTRUCTIVE feedback would be appreciated.
Before it is mentioned I know the second RP is one long shoot scene which may or may not be a bad thing. Also on a reread of the first RP I noticed that I missed words here and there and sometimes used the wrong form of a word. I know that might be a minor problem with over all flow but i hope it doesn't detract from the overall story.